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No longer snow shall hide
The tracks of my upward path
Whilst I erase every
Trace of my sickening past
Burying winter deep
Down my stone-cold heart
Thaw it out
Cancel, rewrite
The pages I shouldn't have
Left blank
Retrieve, recover
My beautiful inner child
A devotee to innocence
It's not too late to smell
The scent of unwithering flowers
Soaked in sorrowless rain, fresh and new
Begin my rebirth, break
The chains that kept me
Grounded
A farewell to my motherland
Set sail to unknown
Countries
And start my life again,
From scratch
Burn down my rage
And set ablaze my
Willpower
On the way to ultimate freedom
The final stairway to the skies above

My inner phoenix, rise!

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Contest entry for #Its-An-Age-Thing's Spring - Season of Change contest.

EDIT - CONTEST OVER! I got a Honourable Mention! :D You can view the feature of my work (along with the winners' ones) here!

It should be pretty self-explanatory, but I'll still add a little insight on it, just in case someone wants to know more about it.

I was compelled to write this after thinking about my previous self - my "winter" self. The person I was during the winter of my life: totally unsatisfied with my life, I used to dislike myself and my past to the point of wanting to reject all I had been every day, and erase everything up to the present date.
It took me a lot of time to understand I was completely wrong. Most importantly, I'd never have been able to understand that alone. Luckily, I met a wonderful person - the most wonderful one I've ever met, and will ever meet. He showed me just how wonderful life was, and I gradually started thinking I really didn't need to cancel my past in order for better days to come: on the contrary, it would have been much wiser to treasure bad experiences as much as good ones, learn from them, and keep a record of them.
I also understood that I used to hate myself because I couldn't improve as much as I wanted. But only then I realized my only limit was actually my hate. By removing it, I was finally able to accept the person I was, am, and will always be; and I finally moved my first step toward improvement.

Yet, there was still something I had to get rid of: all the negativity in me. I learned to say farewell to grudges with a smile. I met the very essence of love, and my love revolved around life just like a sunflower round the sun.
That's what I gave up: hate. By freeding myself from it, the winter of my life was finally over; and a beautiful spring came to warm up my heart, delight me with its wonderful blossoms, sweep away all of the hail that had landed on my soul with fresh rain.

I most probably made lots - and I mean LOTS of mistakes in my little composition. I can't help it, since I'm Italian and I only know English because of my studies. Please let me know if you find some and I'll be glad to improve. Note: some of them (e.g. splitting phrases between one line and the other, change in the word order - like inversion between verb and complement, usage of actually nonexisting words like "sorrowless" and "unwithering") are actually intentional.

Featured in #All-Media's Bimonthly features news article, in =Liuanta's journal and in =Dee-Dee-Blue's journal!

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Congratulation!!!
You've been featured in #All-Media's Bi-Monthly Features :woohoo:

News Article:#All-Media's Bimonthly Features
Blog: Bi-Monthly Features
Main Page: #All-Media
Featured Folder: [link]

Please :+favlove: the article so more people can see YOUR work! :nod:
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:icontexasdreamer01:
freaking awesome! this is being faved and spammed with!
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*heavenriver May 30, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Really? That's so nice of you! Thanks a lot, really!
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I think this could do with some stanza division... :hmm: it feels too long in its entirety, if you know what I mean and if I am making sense here.

Apart from that, I sadly wouldn't refer to bad times in life as "winter", because it's my favourite season out of all, but I understand why you did it and I think you did a great job. Congrats on the Honourable Mention!

And why am I writing in English. :paranoid:
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*heavenriver May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sorry, I like splitting verses so much that I got dragged in. :D
As of winter, I do not dislike it as a season at all. I just made that parallel because the theme of the contest was spring, so I had to express seasons as well through the poem.
Thanks a lot! :D

I don't understand why either xDDD But feel free to. English is fine and it helps other people read the deviants' comments. :D
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:giggle: I know what you mean, methinks.

You're welcome, and lol. Yes, I think that's why I may be doing it... so other people can understand what we are saying.
Also, practice makes perfect. ;)
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*Spamkiller May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow!! E' bellissima!! Congratulazioni per la menzione d'onore, meritatissima. Il ritmo č quasi perfetto, specialmente nella seconda parte, dal 21° verso.

Vorrei essere in grado di scrivere poesia cosė, anche solo in italiano! :clap: :+fav:
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*heavenriver May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh che bello grazie grazie grazie! Sono davvero onorata dal commento, e anche dal fatto che hai speso due minuti in pių per leggere i commenti dell'artista!

Mio segno di apprezzamento -> :hug:
:D grazie ancora!
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*Spamkiller May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ci mancherebbe! :)

Mi capita raramente di favare pezzi di letteratura (odio leggere sullo schermo di un computer: per qualche motivo non riesco a concentrarmi), ma la tua poesia ha catturato la mia attenzione. :hug:
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