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Invisible Bliss

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A morning golden beam kisses the ground
Dewdrops shine on blades of grass
Clock strikes seven, breaks the silence
The town awakes

New dawn, new day
Time to get back working
Carrying on sweet memories
Of the weeks gone by

Building new castles in the sky

Carried on by the damp scent of dawn
Fantasies, promises, and hopes
All of them will last as long as twenty-four hours
Before being drowned in dusk
An endless magic circle
New ones coming, old ones going
...And it's so beautiful

An ever renewing little wonderful miracle
So often it happens, and goes unnoticed
And we voyagers in dreamland never wish to wake up
And see
What's going on outside the window
People walking, waking, watching
While the skies keep on smiling
Such a bliss needs no thanksgiving
For true happiness really lies
In the beauty of everyday lives.
Entry for the Beauty in Life contest. A chant to life, just like many other works of mine.

I feel a bit awkward about this. Maybe it's because English isn't my primary language, but words just didn't want to come out. I don't know whether the outcome is good or not, but I hope so... at any rate, I'd like to get feedback about one thing: does this sound natural to you? Or does it look like "artificial", emotionless word play?
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TheForgottenKnight's avatar
no way! it sounds amazing! I love it. you really got it!.. its twelve hours from dawn to dusk though, unless you live way down south or up north.